Tuesday, February 21, 2012

New Beginnings - Finale!!!

Previous Chapter: New Beginnings Chapter 11

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The next day dawned. Preshika was asked to take Ishitha to the coffee shop near her house.Preshika did not want to get involved in this.But unknowingly she was also one of the reason they broke up.So she wanted to make up for it. She dialed Ishitha's number. Tring tring... And it went on and on until the line went dead. She dialed again. On the second ring, the line connected.
Yeah tell me Preshika, why have you called? Ishitha sounded rude. 
Preshika hesitated for a moment . She gathered her courage and spoke, Well Ishtitha, today is Shilpa's birthday.We are planning to throw a surprise party. Are you in? Silence prevailed for few minutes . Hey are you listening, Preshika inquired.
Yeah well I have never spoken much to Shilpa.I am not really interested to come,Ishitha replied. 
Yeah I know that. This will be our last year together.So we thought of having a get together.All our classmates will be coming.Please do come. Preshika requested.
What do you mean all our classmates?You mean EVERYONE? Ishitha couldn't control her anxiety.
No not everyone. Only girls,said Preshika.

Ishitha finally gave in after an endless argument. They discussed the venue and the time and finally hung up. What a stubborn girl, Preshika wondered.
The clock ticked 10:00. Having nothing to do, Ishitha started from home. The get together was scheduled at 10:30.But well it was Ishitha. They knew Ishitha would reach the place early. So they had it all pre-planned. 


~~~~At the coffee shop~~~~

By the time Ishitha reached the coffee shop, they had made the necessary arrangements. She surveyed the environment. The entire coffee shop was deserted. That is very unusual, she thought. This is one of the places which remained super busy no matter what day it is or rather what time it is. But she was not bothered much about it that day. She wanted to leave the place as soon as possible. As a birthday gift, she had bought a cute little teddy for Shilpa. 10 minutes passed.Still no sign of anyone coming. She started to get suspicious. She dialed Preshika's number. As soon as the line connected,she yelled, where are you ? I see no one here. What is happening?? not really bothered about her very annoying tone. Preshika replied in a hushed tone, we will be there in another ten minutes. Kindly wait . And before Ishitha could ask anything, the line went dead...
Another 15 minutes passed. Frustrated as she already was, she stood up to leave when the gang of girls entered the restaurant. Apparently they were accompanied by a group of boys as well. She quickly glanced at the guys to see if Pritam was present. He was nowhere to be seen.Despite her bitter disappointment , she managed to put up a smile on her face. No one knew she hid her tears behind that beautiful smile of hers.
Everyone quickly settled down and the fake birthday party begun. Shilpa cut the cake and everyone gave her the gifts most of which were empty boxes.They couldn't control the excitement of what was going to happen next. Ishitha's instincts kept telling her that something unusual is going on but she did not ponder over it. Half an hour passed. They decided to play a game and their obvious choice was truth and dare. Ishitha stood to leave, but the people around made sure that she stayed back and not just that but also play the game along with them. The game began.

 He was standing far away from them. Far enough to be out of sight and close enough to watch what was going on.. With every passing minute, he became more and more nervous. Will she accept me? his mind kept shouting out questions . Only time can answer my questions. He was not bothered about anything else today. I will keep apologizing until she is convinced, he promised to himself.
Another half an hour passed. It was now Ishitha's turn to choose between truth or dare. She did not want any of them to question her about her relationship, so she decided to go with dare. Dare, she said out loud. Everyone breathed a sigh of relief. This was the only flaw in their plan. While Pritam was narrating his plan, Arjun questioned. What if she chooses truth? Pritam thought for a while and finally spoke, Lets hope not. Arjun spoke, so the dare for you would be to talk to the one entering the shop first once I say start.Walk towards the entrance with your head facing down. She nodded.

The surrounding suddenly became silent. So silent that the pounding of heart could be heard distinctly. Start, Arjun said. She stood up and walked with her head facing down, as instructed and waited near the entrance. Someone patted on the back.She turned around. There he was on his knees with a box in his hand. He gently opened the box and uttered those magical words "Will you marry me? " 
She was totally taken by surprise. It took her few minutes for the news to sink in. And then  her eyes welled up. She cried, silently. She did not know how to respond. The minute she saw him on his knees, she had forgotten every dispute between them. By that time, every friend of theirs had gathered around. She kept staring at his eyes. Having received no response, he spoke, I know we are too young to be married. This was just to assure you that you are and will be my only love. We will not be married until both are settled. I have spoken to my parents. They are very glad to have you as their DIL. We will convince your parents as well. Please accept this as a token of my love..Say yes please??
She stood up,hugged him tight and whispered in his ear, if not you, then who...!


Arjun signaled everyone to leave the place. As soon as everyone left Pritam narrated the entire plan to Ishitha and they laughed their heart out. Nothing can do us apart, they thought..

 

~~~ The End.... ~~~


As most of you already know, this is my 1st attempt at a short story. I have tried my best.Perception differs though.! It would be really nice if you could give me a feedback on the entire story, the flow and any other suggestion that comes to your mind. Criticism? most welcome :) Help me in improving the quality of my writing :) I would like to thank all my readers and for the support you gave. Thank you :)

24 comments:

  1. All's well that ends well :) Great narration and a very pleasing finale :) Can't wait 4 ur next series :)

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  2. Sema ending :) start writing the next one soooooon :)

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  3. Yeah finally Happy ending:) And loved the complete flow of the story. Gr8 going:):)

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  4. nice one archu.. keep writing... :) All the best.. :)

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    1. Divi :) :) That was unexpected :) Thanks a lot :)

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  5. Awesommmm archu!!!!!! i luvd d endin a lottt more than anythn els!! nice idea :) :) 1 thng id lyk to tel you.. you wer often jumpin b/w present n past, dat wz disturbin d flow of d story.. dat myt disturb d anxiety of d reader lso.. othrwise as ur frst story it wz AWEEEESOM!!! :) :) :)

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    1. Thanks a lot Priya :) :) was it that disturbing? Many said that was nice. Anyway tried something :D And thank you for reading the entire story patiently! :) :) Do keep reading henceforth too :D :D

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  6. Well!! am actually quiet happay now i delayed reading this feel gud story of urs :) coz reading the full story at a stretch really helped in going in synch with the character's emotions :) great one :) keep it up :) Wish u all the luckin the world :)

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    1. Ayeee!!! LIAR :D Only I know the truth :P Anyway thanks a lot da :)

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  7. It is just great!!! I thought this would be a sad ending initially what with Ishita getting irritated and all! Great start!! Keeep writing :)

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  8. "Short and sweet" would be the apt words to describe your first attempt:)I particularly liked the suspense woven in the story line( 11th chapter).Wish you become a prolific writer:)

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    1. Thanks a lot Naveen :) Prolific writer?? I don't know man :) Would be happy even if I get something closer to that :)

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  9. Finally!! :):) good ending:):)

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  10. Sorry for the delay. :) Read it from the beginning once again and it's indeed an 'captivating' awesome story..!! Enjoyed it through!! :) A kiss at the end would have been apt I guess :P :D #JustKidding.. Anyways, Keep up the splendid work archu.. :)) Bonne chance et Bonne courage!! :) - #Rajbala

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  11. The flow was good.Ending was bit a cinematic.Happy to see that you are good at writing. Your way of expressing emotions is good. Keep it up.

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    1. Finally got you to comment :P Thanks mom :D

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